What do you think of these lyrics?

Those lyrics are umm..........AMAZING!! what you should consider doing is: uploading a video of you or someone else singing these lyrics on youtube, and then you never know your song could be the next #1 song on itunes!!! trust me ive done it before and well....it worked! currently im recording in a studeo, unfortunately the video had to be taken off youtube during recording seasons........i wish you luck! please reply:)